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Sponsor |  toontje | Oct 30, 2006 5:42am | What better way introducing myself then placing a poem i wrote a few years back:
The Pond (sept. 1998)
To young and unexperienced
to understand what i am feeling
words don't seem to be appealing
my thoughts a dark deep pond
Confusion and pain wrapped
around my soul in loneliness and cold
but in the deepest of my beeing
i want to drown into you
A warm glowing
light breaking trough the surface
Ain't a man a man allone
Misty i am glazing in the pond
not knowing why i feel
I wrote a few more, in Dutch and German as well, would like to hear what you think about them.
vision2form.nl/personal-uk.html [vision2form.nl/personal-uk.html]
Tonnie |
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|  nmilliken | Dec 15, 2006 5:53pm | | The line "i want to drown into you" is lovely. The rest of the poem is good, but that line is winderful. Worth the price of admission alone. |
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Sponsor | | toontje | Dec 19, 2006 12:47pm | Hi nmilliken,
Thanks for your kind words. Never thought an english teacher would say that about one of my poems. As you can see, english is not my native language.
Saw some very good poems on your site to. Will visit it again and read some more. |
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| | nmilliken | Dec 19, 2006 4:14pm | | It may not be your first language, but you handle it well. Norm |
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